The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps compare
to
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the present Norbiton industrial area and the planned future development of the site.
It is clear that
the river is on the north
side
of the map with the farmland in the front
,
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and the town on the east. There was a rounded junction in the centre connected to the two main roads. The road to the east
side
has a number of factories surrounding
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it. The future plan of Norbiton will change significantly, the river will be
separate
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by the new road and the farmland is occupied by housing and moving to the right
side
. The factories beside the road are going to be replaced by housing with shops in the west-east and the medical centre on the opposite. There will
also
build a playground on the opposite
side
of the farmland
while
the school will be constructed on the east
side
.
Overall
, Norbiton industrial area is going to develop into
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modern living city, only the town will not be moved in the future.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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