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The plans illustrate the changes made to the
theatre
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 in a two-year time period. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that some more facilities like a coordination
room
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, showers, and a restaurant were provided in the
theatre
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 plan in 2012, as compared to 2010.
Secondly
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, the size of the whole
theatre
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 in general expanded, with stage size almost doubled.
To begin
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 with, in 2010, the area used by the dressing
room
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 was transformed into a coordination
room
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 in 2012, while the storage
room
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 was
also
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 replaced by an admin
office
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 over the two years period.
Moreover
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, the dressing
room
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 and showers were built in a separate division in the top left corner of the building in 2012.
Furthermore
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, the location of the auditorium had remained untouched;
however
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, the size of the stage increased almost twice by 2012.
Additionally
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, the old admin
office
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 of the 2010
theatre
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 was left empty in 2012, whereas, a new storage
room
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 replaced the old ticket
office
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, as the ticket
office
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 moved to the bottom right corner of the
theatre
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 building, in the space of the old cafe.
Nevertheless
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, the vacant space in the middle of the old ticket
office
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 and café was used to accommodate a restaurant in 2012.
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, the main door remained in the same place.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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