Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own

Some people are of
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that
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they should embrace a difficult as it is, others argue that they should strive to improve their condition. I believe in
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opinion because no matter how hard the situation is, we should always find
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room for improvement.
This
essay will discuss both
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of
views
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.
To begin
with, unsatisfactory
job
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jobs
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and poor financial
status
are
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of
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the major problems for working families. If one is not satisfied with their
job
,
then
they should do something about it. Either they should look for alternative
job
opportunities or discuss
this
matter with their supervisors. Change is always a good thing whether
if
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it comes in leaving your comfort zone or
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with risks, one should avail
it
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.
Although
,
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wanting to get a
job
that satisfies you comes with a lot of
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, it still is
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risk worth taking. If a person is working day and night to meet their needs end,
then
they should expect a good reward for their hard work. Other people argue that they should maintain their
status
no matter the situation. They don’t do anything to change their given
status
quo. They believe that the situation they’re in is like a test
to
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them.
However
, if actions are not taken
then
they get stuck in
this
endless loop of
lower paying
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incomes. In conclusion, always work hard to change your current
status
whether
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it's
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job
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a job
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or low salary.
Although
, running after materialistic things is not considered healthy but some people have higher hopes in life so they should be given a chance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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