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Recent figure of youngster's crime rate has increased in many cities of the world. Give reasons and solutions to this problem.

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It is undeniable there's a high rate of crime exhibited by the younger ones in
the
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recent past years.
This
 essay will elaborate on the reasons and consequences,
discuss
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 the possible solutions to
such
 outbursts.
Firstly
, quite a number of young people engage in several
crimes
 which
has
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 led to the loss of lives and property. Unnumbered circumstances could be the reason behind
the
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such
 an act.
For instance
, in a family where there's a disagreement between
parents
 leading to separation or invariably divorce,
this
 tends to affect the kids more psychologically , just like in the western world the kids feel dejected and isolated from other kids whose
parents
 are living in a peaceful and happy home, Feeling withdrawn and
this
 tends to affect his future. Most younger ones will try to start acting funny exhibiting a series of attitudes that he shouldn't , engaging in bad peer groups all these attributes to
lack
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 of parental guidelines and care.
For example
 , in Texas early
last
 4months a young boy of fourteen years killed his grandma , and still went
further
 to kill little
children
 in a particular school but before
such
 ,action he displayed some horrible expressions on his social media page which most people didn't understand. Lack of proper education could lead to little ones engaging in various
crimes
.
On the other hand
,
parents
 should consider their
children
's psychological feelings before taking action to avoid
the
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drastic outcomes. Parental guidelines should be measured to bridge the influence of bad peer group association among
children
 in
the
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society. Government and
parents
 should create awareness and educate
children
 on the negative effects of committing
crimes
. Watching
of
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a television channels
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television channels
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 that telecast court proceedings about various
crimes
 can reduce crime among
children
. In summary, the aforementioned in
this
 essay can really help to figure out the reason and as well reduce crime among youngsters.
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