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Students are becoming more and more reliant on technology. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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 era,
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 has become an integral part of human life, and specially
youngesters
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youngsters
 are highly attracted
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 it. With its introduction in the field of education, students have become highly dependent on computers.
This
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 high dependency and will provide a few actionable solutions which can help
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curb the issue at hand. There are two major problems related to being highly reliant on
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.
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 of all, it
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negatively
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 the mental health of the student. Excessive
computer
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usage
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 now become an addiction due to which students have reduced their time spent in social activities and outdoor games.
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, changes in their
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 can be clearly observed.
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 increased
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screen time, which has a direct and negative impact on the eyes of the students. Nowadays, we can easily observe around us that no. of children with spectacles has significantly increased.
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 the concerns are extremely serious and can have a
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 impact on society as a whole, there are a few measures that can solve the problem to a large extent. The government should direct our educational institutes like schools to introduce the
computer
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 in education only where it is necessary. The
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curriculum
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 which can be taught on the
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 should not be shifted to
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 screens.
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, the parents need to be made aware of the harmful impacts of a
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, and they should
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 reduce
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usage
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 while their kids study at home. They should
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 teach their children to understand the appropriate
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 and not become over-dependent on it. In conclusion,
technology
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 has its own boon and bane. Undoubtedly, the
usage
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 of
technology
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 in the student-life can not be stopped as it has various benefits.
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, we need to teach the responsible way to use
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technology
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 like computers, through various interventions from the government and the parents.
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