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Some people think secondary/high school students should study only literature from their own countries.Others however believe students should study literature from all around the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #school #students #study #literature #countries #world
In the modern era,
the
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teaching
literature
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very
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 vital part of our society.
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 is
important
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an important
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 part of every
country
. In
this
 context, some individuals believe that
student
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students
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 must be encouraged to study
literature
such
 as novels,
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 and poetry from their own home
country
; while
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others
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other
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others
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 believe that it is important for every pupil to learn
literature
 from
other
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another country
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country
.
This
 essay will discuss why studying
literature
 from their own
country
 has its benefits,
but
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 why working
on
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all over the
literature
 is ultimately superior.
To begin
 with, there are many benefits to
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literature
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 of their home
country
. Should
students
 learn
literature
? It is very important for
students
 to learn about
this
 from high school. Pupils should
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 local
writer
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 in order to increase the
knowledge
 of their own
country
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country's
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 culture, norms and values. It is the responsibility of schools to add historical books in their course outline because every student must have
knowledge
 about
literature
.
On the other hand
, studying foreign books about culture is more valuable because
this
 is open a lot of opportunities
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 and enlarge their
knowledge
 in the field of
literature
.
For example
, there are multiple Asian or African stories that are very interesting and great enjoyment to every reader. People who have greater
knowledge
 about history that
one
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lead in their life and spend quality of life. It is our duty to focus our
students
learning
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on learning
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literature
 about foreign countries as well. To conclude,
literature
 is the key
of
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 success for every
country
.
This
 essay discussed why learning their own
country
 can be efficient
but
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 why studying
literature
about
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abroad is an extremely better experience. In my opinion everyone especially
students
 should learn
culture
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 of
other
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another country
other countries
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country
.
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