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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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In recent times, Fast
food
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 consumption has become the predominant meal in human life because of busy
time
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 ,The main advantage is that it helps to save
time
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 and the main drawback is that it would be harmful, eating fast meals
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 has several disadvantages. On the one hand, the main benefits of fast
food
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 consumption are that it would save people's
time
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 and it can purchase
very
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at very
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 affordable prices.
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, with a busy schedule, the community would try to eat outside of the home because they don't need to make meals
This
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 way, it would help to save their valuable
time
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.
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, research shows, in Canada's
food
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 consumption, that 60% of people eat
foods
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 from outside of the home because of a busy schedule.
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, the community spend their money
for
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junk
foods
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 because these are inexpensive and delicious, there are including burgers pizzas pasta, that way, eating artificial foodstuff would certainly aid their mental happiness and supports their budget
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, the main negative impact of
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 phenomenon is that it would affect human physical well-being, Fast meals has contained different types of artificial colours , excessive oil, hormones and flavours and consuming excessive fast
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,
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leads to many health-related diseases including diabetes, cholesterol and obesity.
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, research shows, that majority of people have been affected
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heart disease because of excessive-high contain oil on daily basis
foods
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 utilization. Because they do not have good health.
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,they should eat other
foods
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 rather than junk
food
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 to protect their health and for do not have any health problems in the future. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, it plays a vital part in its society. It can enforce the right method before using it
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