Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

Computers
these days play a very important role in everyday life
specially
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for working professionals. The
use
of
computers
among
children
would prove positive as it would make them more familiar with the most commonly used machine and simultaneously develop their cognitive skills.
Although
, there could be negative
effects
too like being less socially active,
not
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indulging in outdoor activities
and
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may
also
lead to risk strain injuries.
However
, I would disagree that using a
computer
everyday
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has more negative
effects
than positive
effects
on
the
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children
. Early adaption of using
computers
will enhance
computing
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skills of
children
.
Firstly
, typing speed will increase which enables them to write their letters or assignments efficiently.
Children
will get more familiar
to
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search engines and how to
use
them effectively.
Children
are quick learners and
adaption
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in
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an
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early age to
use
software like word processors, spreadsheets and
slideshow
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slideshows
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will become their
second
nature.
Children
will
also
use
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the computer
a computer
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computer
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computers
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for entertainment
purpose
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purposes
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. They obviously will be tilted to waste a lot of their time
to play
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computer
games
.
However
, parents can provide them with educational
games
and educational videos. Playing strategy
games
also
improves their
logic
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skill. Online
games
develops
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a sense of competitive spirit among
children
.
Computers
can
also
have some negative
effects
like addiction to live
streaming
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of videos, risk strain injuries due to excessive
use
or
children
can accidentally view
adult
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site
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.
However
, these can be controlled through parental lock features or
computers
to be used under parents’ supervision.
Children
may get addicted to
games
and do not spend enough time in studies or the
children
may avoid doing physical activities altogether.
Nonetheless
, these can be resolved through
schedule
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usage time and activating parental control features. My father provided me
computer
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at
young
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a young
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age. I used many educational
games
like car driving simulation
games
.
Such
games
not only taught me the ABC of driving but
also
the safety rules for the road.
Also
, I've got
phenomenal
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typing speed
over
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100 words per minute. I learned typing at
tender
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age of 10 by using software
such
as typing tutor and playing typing
games
.
This
exceptional typing speed not only helped me to excel in school, college and university life but even at my
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work place
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. As I used to finish my assignments and reports efficiently and effectively. In my
opinion
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there would be both positive and negative
effects
on the
children
to
use
computer
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a computer
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in everyday life but in my own personal
experience
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positive
effects
outweigh the negative
effects
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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