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The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#consideration #career #job #income
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The
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 of
money
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 earned plays a vital role in choosing a profession. It is often argued that its role is actually of utmost importance in comparison with other factors. I strongly agree with the aforementioned statement and I will shed a light on the reasons for my agreement throughout the essay.
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 with, in modern society, providing essential needs cost a considerable
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 of
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.
Therefore
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, being employed in a job is of great importance; a job including a satisfying salary. If employers fail to make ends meet with a low
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 of income, they are more to resign from their position.
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, humans are competitive in nature; they want to possess the latest technology and home appliances in
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 modern age.
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, they feel the urge to work in a career that satisfies their spending and meets their expectations,
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 they would fail to feel a sense of accomplishment and fulfilment. That said, interest in performing the tasks they are assigned is
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 something that should not be underestimated; as innovation and creativeness are possible outcomes of enthusiasm towards one's profession. Despite its importance, given the level of contribution of a career to the sense of fulfilment, providing essentials in life is even more significant.
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, when prioritizing these two-career interest and wages-the latter should be considered
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. In summary, while I can see that some people are of the opinion that the
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 of income is not the most necessary factor as being content and interested in a job is a valued one, because of the dependence of living expenses on how much
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 one makes
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 to a desire to live higher standards in their life, I strongly agree that
money
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 should be prior to any other potential criteria.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • job satisfaction
  • long-term happiness
  • personal fulfillment
  • financial stability
  • passion
  • quality of life
  • work-life balance
  • career advancement
  • societal impact
  • income disparity
  • material success
  • monetary compensation
  • wealth accumulation
  • economic well-being
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