People spend large amounts of time and money on clothes, hairstyles and make up to change their appearance. Is it important for people to be concerned about the way they look? What are the consequences of focussing on physical appearance? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is true,that a large number of
people
spend their time and money on their physical appearance.It is important as well as there are some consequences related to it
also
. To commence with,in the time of globalisation and modernization it is vital to focus on physical appearance.To elaborate ,most
people
worked in the private sector and they mainly concentrate on their employees and how they look.
Moreover
,various products are available at a reasonable price.So, the masses afford them easily.
For instance
,in a
survey
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it has been seen that
people
69% of their income on their looks.
Hence
,
large
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amount of money
is spend
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on these articles.
On the other hand
,spending
large
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amount of money
also
leaves some consequences.To explain,somehow it motivates corruption as
people
want to buy products.
Moreover
,it increases crime and
jeaulosly
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jealously
jealousy
factors.Even more,
huge
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of income they earn
spend
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on buying these articles.
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,in a
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it has been seen that most of the crime is related
of
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these.
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,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Body image
  • Consumer culture
  • Grooming habits
  • Personal identity
  • Professional demeanor
  • Psychological well-being
  • Self-esteem
  • Social comparison
  • Societal standards
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