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Marriage is seen as an important part of life. What are advantages and disadvantages of marrying a person at a young age?

#marriage #part #life #person #age
There is no denying the fact that the phenomenon of
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the wedding
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wedding
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 is seen as
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 precious part of humans lives.One school of thought opinion that it is worthless,
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 others consider that a couple of problems
also
 occur because of the same.
Although
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 has a plethora of merits yet numerous demerits are
also
 there which will be elaborated
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 upcoming paragraphs. On the brighter side,the topic has
multitude
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 of benefits
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commencing with the
first
 and foremost reason.In the past , older people of the village married
there
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 daughter or son at
the
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 young
age
.They promise
there
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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 that their children will be married at the
age
 they decided because of
this
 the children become
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responsible
irresponsible
rresponsible
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responsible
 at
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 early
age
, and
there
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 parents get relief from the tension of the marriage as
there
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 juvenile future is secured .To cite an example,
elder
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 people of the family decide to
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the proposal
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proposal
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of
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 the other party and with
the
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 similar thought ,they decided
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 wedding of their adolescent .
As a result
 ,they become mature before the time and understand all the talks that
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 going
in
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 the families. On the darker side, wedding's at
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earlier
eariler
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earlier
age
 harm the
personsnality
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personality
 of the individual and give birth to the problem of
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over population
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overpopulation
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.
For instance
,youngsters do
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married
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 at
the
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 young
age's
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 and
than
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 faces oodles of problems in their future as
there
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their
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believes
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 are different
then
 they decided to take
divorse
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divorce
 due to which they become said as well as their families go
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 depression .
In addition
 ,they gave birth to a child at
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age
 ,which increase the population of the country ,
thus
 it
also
 gave rise to
the
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other problem
such
 as
shortage
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 of food , houses and so on.As a consequence ,marriages at
the
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 young
age's
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 become a big danger to the country as well as to the youngsters. In a nutshell,without any doubt,
this
 is a mixed bag.If
this
 statement has many positives
then
 the
negatives
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 points notion may not be underestimated.The public of the nation should
follow's
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 the law, as young blood should marry each other at the
age
 decided by the state.

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