Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. What do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative developments?

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These days, in several countries a lifestyle

that is

getting higher makes

consumptive

Correct article usage

the consumptive

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behaviour of young adults change

due to

the present technology never

has

Unnecessary verb

apply

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before that almost

people

cannot resist the temptation to

wasted

Wrong verb form

waste

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goods. to According my point of view,

this

affects negative development,

this

essay will explain the point to justify my statement. The enhancement of digital technology makes several big tech companies develop applications so that

people

can make buying and selling transactions easily and comfortably. In the past, when

people

wanted to find an item, they had to go around to get that item

while

now there is no need to do it anymore because without leaving their chair buying goods can be done with a fingertip and money on the bank account.

Also

, the phenomenon of social media cannot be denied, where now almost everyone has an account on various social media. Currently, social media is

also

used as a place to promote all kinds of products with the help of influencers who can influence young adults to be like their idols thereby increasing the consumptive lifestyle. As mentioned before, shopping

that is

not supported by reasonable and urgent needs can hurt a person's financial condition, even though many

people

are currently consumptive using credit cards.

This

reflects that the person's income is not sufficient to fulfil their desires, so they must be in debt.

Furthermore

instead

of spending leisure time on unnecessary shopping, it will be better to do something else

that is

more positive and does not cause debt.

To conclude

, young adults who tend to spend leisure time wasting money to pay for things that are not useful is a negative issue.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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