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Some people feel that the media has the strongest impact on people’s lives. Others feel that it is politicians who have the most control over the way people lives. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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someone
argue
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argues
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 that the biggest one which
effects
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affects
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people
 is the
media
, while other
people
 think
that is
 influential
politicians
. Both views will be discussed, and I believe that the former view would be more convincing. On the one hand, the
media
 would have the
power
 which can handle
people
.
First
, these days, we tend not to be able to live without the mass
media
. Not only the amount of
media
 but
also
 the number of
people
 exposed to it is significantly increasing.
Therefore
, it results in increasing
of
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in
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 the
media
's influence.
For example
, we would face many kinds of advertisements. You might have some experience; you sing along to the song of the advertisement that you were exposed
repeatably
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.
Secondly
, most
people
 would have a belief which is without a little doubt.
For instance
, there would be so much information, which is not proven, but the public believes it with little doubt.
Such
 situations can prove the
power
 of mass
media
.
On the other hand
, the more
power
 the
politicians
 have, the more impact their talk can have.
Firstly
, all the
people
 must follow the politics which
politicians
 make because it can be compulsory.
Therefore
, as
people
 can be controlled by it, it would have
the
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an
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 impact which cannot ignore. In the
second
 place,
such
 politics give
people
 a belief that it was proved through a series of
the
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complex processes. it results in
people
 believing it and it causes the
power
 of
politicians
, as well. In conclusion, the
media
 would have a very strong influence which can handle
people
although
 the impact of
politicians
 is
also
 strong.
Thus
, I suppose that the
media
 would be the biggest effect on
people
’s lives.
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