It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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people
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it is essential to take
risks
in
professional
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their professional
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and personal
lives
.
My
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point of view
people
who take
risks
have
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more benefits
such
as
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having
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success and
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income and
find
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finding
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a partner
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partner
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and
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a relationship
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relationship
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.
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aspect of
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statement is
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what
person
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a person
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had. Some
people
take
risks
and it is vital because
people
could have success and increase income in professional
live
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. While in personal live
people
are likely to find
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a partner
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partner
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partners
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for
relationship
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relationships
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. Several
people
go out of
comfort
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their comfort
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zone and take
risks
which could positively affect on life.
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in professional
lives
is
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important
,
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if
person
wants
have
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successful
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a successful
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place in
a
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apply
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work.
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,
assistant
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the assistant
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took
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a risk
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risk
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risks
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and did
important
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the important
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project
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projects
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. After completing
project
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the project
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,
assistant
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the assistant
an assistant
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could have
high
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a high
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workplace and earn more money.
People
could achieve
a
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apply
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major success not only in
professional
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their professional
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lives
,
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but
also
in
personal
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their personal
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lives
. Private
life
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islife
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also
essential for several
people
.
For instance
,
person
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a person
the person
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took
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a risk
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risk
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risks
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and met another
person
for
relationship
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a relationship
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. One of the
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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in
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of
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taking
risks
in professional and personal
lives
is lose
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is lost
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what
person
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a person
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had. There is
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chance
change
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a chanse
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chanse
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chance
that if
person
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take
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risks
,
person
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a person
the person
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could be fired
in
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from
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work.
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,
person
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a person
the person
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took
project
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a project
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,
however
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,however
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it had not been
complited
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completed
correctly.
In addition
boss
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the boss
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could fire the worker. Sometimes taking
risks
dangerous for
people
. To sum up, in my
opinion
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there are more advantages than disadvantages,
people
take
risks
and have
good
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a good
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workplace and
likely
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are likely
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to increase income.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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in private
lives
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people
could find
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a partner
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partner
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partners
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have
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and have
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relationships.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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