In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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very important than renting accommodation. I believe it is because people prefer stable

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, you do not have to pay any rent and you can save that money for other

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you can do whatever you want in your

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, I think it is a positive situation because of security reasons . today society is very dangerous and we cannot trust people at all.

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in Sri Lanka about scamming people . And you can raise a dog as a pet or you can set CCTV camera around your

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but when you are in a rented

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and most owners do not like pets . So, having your own home makes you feel more secure and you can get any action for security without asking anyone.

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while they love to have their own

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and they can show off in front of others. you can show your wealth through your

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and can show your wealth to others.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
customize
decorate
belonging
community
potential
future generations
long-term
cost advantage
control
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