In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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having your own

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very important than renting accommodation. I believe it is because people prefer stable

life

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one or having our own

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positive

solution for me.

Firstly

, every person

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to have a stable

life

rather than unstable

life

. Because having your own home makes everything easy.

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, you do not have to pay any rent and you can save that money for other

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you and your family

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you can do whatever you want in your

place

and no one going to stop you. But if you rent a

place

you have to follow all

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owners

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rules,

that is

very difficult.

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, you can enjoy your time with your family without worrying about other things.

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, it is always good to

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your own

place

, whereas living in the

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place

Secondly

, I think it is a positive situation because of security reasons . today society is very dangerous and we cannot trust people at all.

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are many situations

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in Sri Lanka about scamming people . And you can raise a dog as a pet or you can set CCTV camera around your

house

but when you are in a rented

accomodation

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accommodation

, you have to ask owners permission

first

and most owners do not like pets . So, having your own home makes you feel more secure and you can get any action for security without asking anyone.

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, having

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home can be

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effect on your

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children

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while they love to have their own

place

and they can show off in front of others. you can show your wealth through your

house

. In conclusion , owning a

house

can make feel stable about their

life

also

it has

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positive effects like having

secure

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place

and can show your wealth to others.

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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many parts of the world, some famous people are considered ‘role models', and they are having an increasing influence on the young. Does the advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

Governments should spend time on railways rather than roads.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Your friend wants to send her/his children to your house for the weekend. Write a letter to him/her and say – Agree to this arrangement. – Say what time is suitable for you. – Describe what you are planning to do.

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?