In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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nation
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having your own
house
is
a
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very important than renting accommodation. I believe it is because people prefer stable
life
than
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unstable
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one or having our own
place
and some value
into
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our
life
.
this
is a
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positive
postive
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positive
solution for me.
Firstly
, every person
love
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to have a stable
life
rather than unstable
life
. Because having your own home makes everything easy.
For example
, you do not have to pay any rent and you can save that money for other
works
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.
also
you and your family
secure
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with the
propert
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property
proper
.
Basically
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you can do whatever you want in your
place
and no one going to stop you. But if you rent a
place
you have to follow all
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owners
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rules,
that is
very difficult.
Furthermore
, you can enjoy your time with your family without worrying about other things.
However
, it is always good to
having
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your own
place
, whereas living in the
others
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place
.
Secondly
, I think it is a positive situation because of security reasons . today society is very dangerous and we cannot trust people at all.
For instance
,
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are many situations
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in Sri Lanka about scamming people . And you can raise a dog as a pet or you can set CCTV camera around your
house
but when you are in a rented
accomodation
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accommodation
, you have to ask owners permission
first
and most owners do not like pets . So, having your own home makes you feel more secure and you can get any action for security without asking anyone.
Finally
, having
own
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home can be
positive
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effect on your
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children
children's
childrens
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 while they love to have their own
place
and they can show off in front of others. you can show your wealth through your
house
. In conclusion , owning a
house
can make feel stable about their
life
,
also
it has
a
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positive effects like having
secure
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a secure
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place
and can show your wealth to others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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