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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as unsatisfactory job or short of money. Others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of consumption and habits
in
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coffee
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 and tea in five cities, namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart in Australia. It is noticeable that the Australian in five regions stood at least 50% having
coffee
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 in café
in
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apply
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last
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 month, while the city residents in Australia who bought fresh
coffee
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was
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 all below 45% in surveyed areas.
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 at the chart in more detail, it is so clear that the city
Adelaide
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of Adelaide
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remain
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 relatively low percentages in three of the surveyed items, purchasing fresh
coffee
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 had the lowest percentage,
stood
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 at about 34%.
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, the proportion of buying instant
coffee
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 remain stable in five
of
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cities, which fluctuated between 45% and 55%. Overall, surveyed residents in different regions had diverse habits and consumption
on
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coffee
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 and tea in the
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 four weeks, which made the total difference between different cities.
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