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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There have been increasing debates on the consequences of home-schooling a
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 or sending them to a regular
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, both have their own advantages. Teaching a
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 at home helps in focused learning in comparison to a regular
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 where there is only one teacher available to address the needs of
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 class.
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 to
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child
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children
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 can
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 be given more exposure to
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real life
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 scenarios
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 as engaging them in different activities i.e. gardening, cooking etc to make them help put use theory into practice. A
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 protected from incidents like bullying which is very common in schools and can lead to impaired development in the longer run. One
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 advantage is less competition
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 less stress on a
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 while studying since he will not be constantly comparing him/her self to other students.
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, a specialized faculty in regular
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 means experienced individuals who are well equipped to deal with children from different walks of life.
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, the
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 facilities offered are
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 to those that could be provided at
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 as a sports ground, swimming pool and computer labs.
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, while studying with other students, a
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 would want to stay competitive in comparison to other students to achieve a sense of accomplishment. In my opinion, it is important for a
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 to go to
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 in order to experience a normal routine which is most crucial for a
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's development. An incident in my family reinforced my belief since my nephew was
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 and it turned out to be a very bitter experience for him and even led to him having anger issues since he thought he was being spoilt from all the attention.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tailored learning
  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
  • extracurricular activities
  • diversity
  • structured environment
  • customized education
  • well-rounded education
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