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INCREASING THE PRICE OF PETROL IS THE BEST WAY TO SOLVE GROWING TRAFFIC AND POLLUTION POROBLEMS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? WHAT MEASURE DO YOU THINK MIGHT BE EFFECTIVE?

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People are travelling more today than ever before. For
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, increasing the price of petrol will not necessarily decrease traffic and pollution problems.
This
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world
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 is not getting any bigger but the populace is and
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fuel based
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cars
 are becoming more efficient. The amount of land in any specific city is limited and so are its roads.
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, there is only one highway road connecting Mymensingh to central Dhaka.
Hence
, even if fuel prices are increased, it will not be effective enough to decrease traffic difficulties as newer people will start to travel
instead
 of those who could not previously afford to travel at that price. One way to help
this
 situation would be to encourage everyone to use
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public transport more. Investments in research and development to make
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carbon emitting
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cars
 less harmful to the environment
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 growing in the transport industry. Car companies have made significant scientific advancements in hybrid technologies to have
a car travel
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 more distance using the same amount of gas. So, the consumption of fuel would be the same regardless of the higher price. Alternatively, if more charging ports are installed, consumers may shift entirely from hybrid
cars
 to electric
cars
 which have zero carbon emissions but
then
 again the cost of the entire process would be very expensive unless government subsidized. After analyzing
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all aspects
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 the situation of increasing petrol prices, it can be concluded the entire population is dependent on petrol.
However
, it can be hoped that in the future new innovations would help.
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