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INCREASING THE PRICE OF PETROL IS THE BEST WAY TO SOLVE GROWING TRAFFIC AND POLLUTION POROBLEMS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? WHAT MEASURE DO YOU THINK MIGHT BE EFFECTIVE?

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People are travelling more today than ever before. For
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, increasing the price of petrol will not necessarily decrease traffic and pollution problems.
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 will be shown by looking at the fact that the size of the cities around
world
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 is not getting any bigger but the populace is and
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fuel-based
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fuel based
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cars
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 are becoming more efficient. The amount of land in any specific city is limited and so are its roads.
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, there is only one highway road connecting Mymensingh to central Dhaka.
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, even if fuel prices are increased, it will not be effective enough to decrease traffic difficulties as newer people will start to travel
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 of those who could not previously afford to travel at that price. One way to help
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 situation would be to encourage everyone to use
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public transport more. Investments in research and development to make
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carbon-emitting
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carbon emitting
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carbon-emitting
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cars
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 less harmful to the environment
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 growing in the transport industry. Car companies have made significant scientific advancements in hybrid technologies to have
a car travel
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car travel
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 more distance using the same amount of gas. So, the consumption of fuel would be the same regardless of the higher price. Alternatively, if more charging ports are installed, consumers may shift entirely from hybrid
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 to electric
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 which have zero carbon emissions but
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 again the cost of the entire process would be very expensive unless government subsidized. After analyzing
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all aspects
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 the situation of increasing petrol prices, it can be concluded the entire population is dependent on petrol.
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, it can be hoped that in the future new innovations would help.
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