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Students are becoming more and more reliant on technology. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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 modern era technology is the basic need of learners.Readers utilize most of the gadgets in their studies like computers,smartphones and so on.According to my view various
student
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using
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 computer in
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 wrong way.There are many remedies
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 these
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 of problems
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available. Today internet is a big source of knowledge.Lots of student studies can be done through computer with the help of
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,teenagers search
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 things on websites.These pages on
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 can be
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access
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 by anyone.And it is a big stopper in student study life.
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 one main cause is that addiction
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 technology like
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gaming
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bad
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 impact on
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.students spent most of the time to play gaming.The straight effect of gaming on
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mind
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.They compete with others and demanding to buy expensive gadgets from
parents
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.Use of mobile phones in the classroom or during lecture leads to disturbance.
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,there are many solutions
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available to demise that type of problem.
government
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 should ban porn websites and games.Parents
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also
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 give knowledge to their
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child's
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children
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 that aware about true use of technology.
family
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 can set fixed study time on
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everday
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 and spend lots of time with family.
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