Students are becoming more and more reliant on technology. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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modern era technology is the basic need of learners.Readers utilize most of the gadgets in their studies like computers,smartphones and so on.According to my view various

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available. Today internet is a big source of knowledge.Lots of student studies can be done through computer with the help of

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by anyone.And it is a big stopper in student study life.

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one main cause is that addiction

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.students spent most of the time to play gaming.The straight effect of gaming on

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.They compete with others and demanding to buy expensive gadgets from

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.Use of mobile phones in the classroom or during lecture leads to disturbance.

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,there are many solutions

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available to demise that type of problem.

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should ban porn websites and games.Parents

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that aware about true use of technology.

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Students are becoming more and more reliant on technology. What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions?

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