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People today shop, work and communicate with others via the Internet instead of face-to-face communication. Is it a positive or negative development?

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In the recent era,
people
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 rely on the
Internet
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 to purchase, work from home and connect with friends and family, whereas previously
people
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 tend to meet in person. From my perspective, there are some advantages of
people
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 using the
Internet
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 in their daily life and would be discussed in the following. Nowadays, it is easy to use portable dives for
people
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 to shop.
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,
people
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 in modern times are too busy which leads to they do not
have
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time
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 to go to the grocery store and purchase daily essentials.
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,
people
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 can order a meal or furniture without going to the store which might need a long
time
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 to reach.
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,
people
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 can save
time
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 taking care of their children.
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, due to the pandemic, many
people
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 are not allowed to go out to buy food at a specific
time
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. For those who order food on the
internet
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 could be an optimal choice.
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, an increasing number of
people
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 shopping online would provide more employment opportunities for society. When consumers have more requirements and the company would offer more services to their clients. In conclusion,
people
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 shopping on the
internet
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 is a positive development for everyone who lives in the modern era. It could help
people
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 save their
time
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 and
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 have an enormous benefit to their employment.
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