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Some people believe that more academic subjects such as chemistry, physics and history should be taught in schools, while others believe that students will drive more benefits from studying practical subjects, such as motor mechanics, electricity engineering or cooking. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The provided table chart depicts information about genres of films, which are viewed by four different country citizens. The provided
two
 bar diagrams compare information for
two
 different countries in 2010 in terms of spending money on various household services. Overall, a glance at the graph
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revels
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 that the main percentage difference between Japan and Malaysia
lied
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on
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 housing and
transport
 expenditures as opposed to the rest of things,
such
 as food, health care and other goods and services with negligent differences in
portion
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. In terms of the most significant feature of the graph, in Japan, housing and
transport
 accounted for just over
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two fifths
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 collectively. When viewed separately, housing comprised 21 per cent, whereas
transport
 expenses constituted exactly a fifth. With regards to Malaysia,
transport
 and housing made up 10 and 34
percent
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 respectively. On the whole, these
two
 expenditures accounted for nearly 41 per cent in
the
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both countries. In stark contrast, the remaining
stuffs
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stuff
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 witnessed roughly the same fractions in both countries in 2010. As it is seen, they vary by 3
percent
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 from each other.
For instance
, food expenditures in Japan made up 24%,
meanwhile
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 in the
second
country
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 it occupied a little more, 27
percent
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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