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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions

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Studying another
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 apart from our mother tongue has always been a challenge to most
people
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. Some said that
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 task's only purpose is for travelling or working in another region while others indicated that there are more reasons for learning a foreign tongue.
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 essay will analyze both perspectives and demonstrate my view on
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 matter.
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, a job or a trip
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 another country has been posed to be the only reason for learning a
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 by some folk.
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 is often thought of as a barrier to communication for
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 coming from different countries. Considering that working and studying involve lots of communication, it is true that learning the nation's native tongue is necessary. In a working environment,
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 are assigned tasks by ones with higher authority who mostly comes from that country. In order to understand and tackle the problems completely, one should have profound knowledge of the
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 as well as the culture of the current country they are working in. For travelling, it is necessary to know at least some basic sentences of the native
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 in case of misfortunes
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 as getting lost or being robbed. Without studying the same
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, it is impossible for a person to explain his or her situation to the authorities of that foreign nation. Apart from travelling and working, learning a
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 seems to play an unnecessary role in a person's everyday life. Without a chance to use that
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, it is likely that we would forget the lexical and syntax resources in that linguistic system.
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, many
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 have stated that jobs and travelling are not the only purposes of learning a
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.
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 is the root of all cultures and conventions. It is the source of human perspective as well as traditions in all countries. In
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 regard, many
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 argue that learning an accent helps them broaden their knowledge and shorten the distance between
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 from all over the world. Considering the development of technology, it is now easy to connect with
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the community
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 from anywhere,
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, resulting in the demand for learning a new
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 in order to understand each other and not trigger any conflict due to the lack of other cultures' knowledge. In conclusion,
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 is an absolute requirement for working and a helpful tool for travelling.
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, I believe that
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occupation or a trip is not the only reason for obtaining a new
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. As
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, we always long for communication and community, especially a community on the internet with all kinds of
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.
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, a new
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 will support us in many other aspects of life, not just working and travelling.
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