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Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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well educated people are skilled professionals and they get high salaries for their own talent.
On the other hand
,
work
experience
 is
also
 a key to achieving greater positions in the company to get high wages. In the following essay, my opinion is in favour of a degree as the
education
 to get successful.
Firstly
,
education
 is part of our lives which makes us skilled professionals to achieve better
jobs
 and salaries. To make our lifestyle better or to be in a good position one must require high-paid
jobs
. Qualification is the only basic source to
work
 in corporate companies, skilled workers like doctors, engineers and computer literates are in demand because of their higher studies.
Moreover
, it is important to live in a society which can teach us and can be shared with youngsters and other generations.
Secondly
, few people believe that an effort background makes us get high-paid
jobs
. The companies which give greater opportunities depend on
work
experience
 as well, like managers and CEOs need a lot of
experience
 to run organization successful, practical knowledge is better than many books to deal few problematic situations
experience
 is helpful
therefore
 having more years of
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background gets high paid salaries. example CEO of google who started his career as a basic trainer in the company now earns millions. To conclude both
education
 and
work
experience
 are important for high-paid
jobs
 but
education
 takes the upper hand because it's a basic thing to get
jobs
 without degree one can not find
work
 easily . so it more important than
experience
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
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