It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives

It is said that taking
risks
brings a lot of benefits.
However
, it
also
gives us some drawbacks. First of all, it is obvious that taking
risks
will cause a great loss if
people
do it and fail. In
personal
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life,
this
loss might not be so harmful.
However
, it will be really
harmfull
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harmful
in professional life, because
people
take
a
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responsibility not only for themselves but
also
others
such
as
colleages
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colleagues
, customers and their families. It will even damage
the
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society from
the
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economic point.
On the other hand
, we can receive huge benefits by taking
risks
.
Firstly
, we can learn how to prepare for one goal through
this
process. In order to achieve the aim,
people
will make all the
efforts
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to think about it and try to find
more
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efficient way. If they do
this
in
the
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professional circumstances, they will recognise the responsibility and importance of cooperation.
Also
, it will be completely meaningful even though
people
can't achieve the goal after taking
risks
. They will learn the reason why they have failed and how to change it. The failure will enable them to improve their skills and to achieve their
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next time. As I mentioned, it is true that taking
risks
give
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us both advantages and disadvantages.
However
, it can be argued that the benefits
outweighed
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the drawbacks in that we can obtain advantages not only from the result but
also
from the process of taking
risks
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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