Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can care of their children, while others think childcare centres provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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parents

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working

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families are increasing in number. For

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reason, it is important to consider who can take

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of

children

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. People have two different

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with respect to

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topic.

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, some people think that

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play important role in child upbringing, while others think that nursery school is the best choice. I agree with the idea of

children

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must be taken

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of

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childcare

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centres. On the one hand, it is argued that due to

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parents

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work, so as not to remain uncontrolled,

children

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are taken

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of by other family members,

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as

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. Actually,

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is

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thrifty and safer because

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rely on family members.

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,

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is the

coziest

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way for

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.

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, it is irrefutable that being taken

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of by

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enables

children

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to learn their family

tradition

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nearer

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, I firmly believe that

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don't have adequate experience to look after

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, even some of them are physically feeble and inactive,

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parents

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have sufficient reasons to put their

children

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at

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childcare

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a childcare

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centre. Actually, one of the main advantages of nursery

school

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schools

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is that they have trained staff who have enough practical ability to grow a child.

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,

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childcare

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centre offers entertainment which comes interesting to

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.

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, nursery schools give an opportunity to interact and play with others which will help them to enhance their communication skills. To conclude,

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of them are up to the

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and their financial condition.

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how much

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are safer for

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,

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centres have professional employees and be looked after by experts will be beneficial for them to adapt to society easily in the future.