IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are crippled by gridlocked traffic. What are the possible solutions for these cities?

#car #ownership #thirty #years #cities #world #traffic
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Growing
Add an article
A growing
The growing
show examples
 number of traffic jams become a major problem in cities all over the
Correct your spelling
world
show examples
word
Correct your spelling
world
show examples
, due to the rising number of car owners.
Although
Linking Words
 it is a complex problem that affects everyone's life, there are solutions that would improve the quality of big city life.
First
Linking Words
 of all, improvement in
organization
Add an article
the organization
show examples
 of public transport may decrease the
amount
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
 of vehicles on the roads. As far as there are not enough buses or tram lines people would
chose
Change the verb form
choose
show examples
 to drive
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
 their own
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
show examples
 would block the most important spots during rush hours.
For instance
Linking Words
, rebuilding the underground in Warsaw decreased the traffic and improved the
everyday's
Change noun form
everyday
show examples
 life of many citizens.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the prices of the tickets should encourage to
chose
Wrong verb form
choose
show examples
 public transport over the car.
Secondly
Linking Words
, authorities of the cities should develop cycle paths that would convince many to move around on a bike.
Although
Linking Words
ridding
Correct your spelling
riding
show examples
 on the bike in crowded places may be considered
as
Change preposition
apply
show examples
dangerous and risky, people would not be afraid to bike
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 wide and safe paths separated just
for
Change preposition
by
show examples
 bicycles.
For instance
Linking Words
, in countries
of
Change preposition
like
show examples
 Benelux where the cycle paths are more developed than in any other
parts
Fix the agreement mistake
part
show examples
 of Europe, the majority of people bikes to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
work or school because it is the quickest, cheapest and
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
most convenient way. To conclude,
current
Add an article
the current
show examples
 situation in the cities forces us to reevaluate opportunities to improve city driving. To decrease
number
Change the article
the number
show examples
 of the cars in town public transport should be reorganized and citizens should
be encourage
Change the verb form
be encouraged
show examples
 to use their bikes.
Submitted by A.A.B on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: