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Individuals should take care of the environment or is it the government’s responsibility Discus both side and give your opinion

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Protection of the
environment
 is crucial to the sustainability of life.Because the community provide for their all needs from the habitat
such
 as shelter, food and clothes.
Therefore
, they should create a viable habitat.
However
, the human
race
 uses the earth unconsciously. Especially, they overuse the world resources to increase productivity.
Also
, they use numerous dangerous methods like fertilizers, poisons and chemical materials. For
this
 reason, governments and members of societies must be responsible for the protection of the
environment
.
Otherwise
, we will not find a world to survive. As we know people need some basic needs to survive. Only
nature
 can provide these needs like shelter, nourishment and clothes.
For example
, foods can be produced
as a result
 of cultivation.
Additionally
, individuals can make buildings with construction materials which can be found only in
nature
.
Moreover
, clothes can be manufactured using agricultural products. Literally, it means that
nature
 is the only provider and supporter of the human
race
 to survive.But, the desires of the human
race
 are unlimited and they do not care about
nature
.
For instance
, they use fertilisers to rise plantations, harmful chemical materials and poisons. They are responsible for contamination
as a result
 of these production processes. I strongly believe methods of the community to manufacture goods and foods in order to survive are only responsible for pollution.
Therefore
, both authorities and individuals are responsible. Because societies occur with the existence of both sides. People and governments benefit from the
environment
 so that reach to same goals. Government must create rules to protect the
environment
 and individuals must obey these rules for sustainable habitat. İn conclusion, taking care of the
environment
 is very important for the human
race
, because the earth can ensure the need to survive. İf society does not care about the earth, they will suffer from providing basic needs.
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