Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social, behoviour ond lack of respect for others. What might caused this situation? How to improve it?

It is unfortunate that in the midst of vast progress in every field of
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there is
also
a
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growth
in the
antisocial
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anti-social
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behaviour and
people
have become less respectful of each other.
This
essay intends to analyze some causes of
this
phenomenon and suggest some ways to ameliorate the situation. Today, we live in an era of technology in which the whole Earth has shrunk and become a global village. Everybody is connected to everybody through telephone lines and the
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, but the warmth of relationships has taken a back seat. Most
people
have more than enough wealth, comfort and freedom, but their hearts desire even more. To satisfy their
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greed
people
have become workaholics, and as a
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have no time for family and friends.
People
have become selfish, isolated and indifferent. Each person is busy in his own quest for more. To add to it, the youngsters who are at ease with the new technology think that the elderly are good for nothing and
that is
why they don't respect them. The changing family structure is another big cause of
this
phenomenon. Earlier,
people
lived in joint families and the grandparents were there to supervise the children. Now there are nuclear families in which both parents go out to work, and children are left unattended in the hands of pervasive media like the TV and the
lnternet
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Internet
. No one monitors what they watch and they see the programs full of violence and crime, which makes them
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. The pressure of consumerist society and peers
also
breeds
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behaviour. To add to it, the values of traditional culture are being lost and
people
are following the global culture, which is
also
considered
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by the orthodox elderly. There are many solutions to
this
problem.
To begin
with,
people
have to learn to strike a balance between work and family life.
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should
also
fix the maximum hours a worker can work per week so that exploitation is not there in the job market.
People
should revert back to the old joint family system.
This
would be in the
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benefit
of all. The children would learn moral values and the elderly would be well looked after.
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effects of excessive consumerism should be taught to the
people
. Media can play a big role in highlighting the good points of
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traditional and
the
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western
culture
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cultures
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so that
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people
can adopt good social values. Neighbourhood associations should be set up to connect
people
to each other. Summing up,
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behaviour and mutual lack of respect in today's times can be dealt with by taking simple measures, and individuals and governments should collectively take these steps.
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