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The benefits of computers in modern society far outweigh the disadvantages. What do you think? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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It is a common belief that using
computers
 were advantages more than disadvantages .I support
this
 opinion because electronic products are an ever-changing world. People can
use
computers
 to work or study.Actually,it is a double-edged sword for us. My view on
this
 issue is that the worker always uses
computers
 to work or save important information .
Subsequently
,any companies have
computers
 that make workers fast and clean finish projects.
Moreover
, the designer needs to
use
 computer design fashion and patterns.Due to more businessman bring it every day.
On the other hand
,we can adopt a computer to send messages to the boss or client. It makes us easy to search for files and we can listen to music in our free time. On top of that,
computers
 are really helpful for students.For ,instance more country students
use
computers
 to send homework and value email.They can
use
computers
 to check grammar or sentences.
However
, some children like playing with them on the computer. They are easily addicted to games.
Furthermore
, parents need to teach them and let children learn knowledge as well. We can see that
computers
 make us have more knowledge, even though it has a bad impact,but we
use
computers
 normally, it can bring happiness and helpful life. In our free ,time we can watch online videos or shows. The student does not go outside to school.
This
 advance saves time.As we can see people reduce using paper and pens,and a person knows about environmental protection.
Then
 our earth can be better and have more trees.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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