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Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the reals need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 budget of one area in the UK in 2017 and 2018. The table displays
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 of money, while
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 police budget increased with the national government being the biggest funder in both years. In terms of
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 of cash spent on buildings and transport remained the same form. In 2017, police had
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 budget of 304.7
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, which significantly climbed to 318.6
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 in 2018. The greatest source was
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 government, with an increase from 175.5 to 177.8
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. Local taxes had the largest rise from 91.2 to 102.3
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 in 2018, 0.5
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 year.
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 expenditure consisted
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 officers and staff at 75% in 2017.
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 technology almost doubled from 8% to 14%. Spending on buildings and transport remained unchanged at 17%.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • perceived needs
  • emotional appeal
  • brand image
  • marketing strategies
  • materialistic values
  • consumerism
  • manipulative tactics
  • endorsements
  • celebrity marketing
  • promotional tools
  • status symbols
  • luxury
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