Some employees offer their employees subsidised membership of gyms and sport clubs,believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work.Other employees see no benefit in doing so.

Nowadays for the productivity of companies,employers are constantly get rewarded.Some
people
believe , that
offeringsports
Correct your spelling
offering sports
and gym
membership
as
a
Change the article
an
show examples
economical
reward
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
farmore
Correct your spelling
far more
efficient than any other way of
reward
. In my opinion, having a
reward
for physical maintenance is much more worth than any other thing. Some
people
in companies think that they will not get any advantage by having a
membership
physical
Change preposition
in physical
show examples
centers
Change the spelling
centres
show examples
or sports organizations.To elaborate,some of them think that monetary gifts or any special gifts may be worthy enough to resolve the hardships of their terrible lives.Because the warning of a common man in a developing country is considerably low.
For example
,If a person is working full time and over time for a
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
company
Add an article
a company
the company
show examples
he is in need of money rather than any
membership
.In that ,
case
Add an article
the case
show examples
if he got rewarded by a member token of
such
a
fitness
centre will he be pleased?Having a double payment is much more with for
people
like
this
.So the
reward
he expects might be a huge difference in his
life
.
On the other hand
,Having a workout daily or playing a game on a court makes your problems vanish.As in,For the majority of
people
fitness
is
a
Change the article
an
show examples
accelerating need.When you have to claim
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
such
reward
from the workplace will always
Add a missing verb
be beneficial
show examples
beneficial
Replace the word
benefit
show examples
Change preposition
to
show examples
the longevity of
life
and
also
aid to stabilize mental and physical well-being.
For instance
,Indeed, working out daily definitely make physics and mental status strong.
Therefore
,it grants you a healthy
life
.
However
frequent physical activities reach you a distressed
life
. In conclusion,some think that having a workout
membership
is comparatively more advantageous than any other specific
reward
.
This
essay argued, why
people
are not so fond of physical subside whereas some of them are primarily interested in
fitness
tokens.
Finally
,In my ,opinion I think the best
reward
one can get as
a
Change the article
an
show examples
economical appreciation is a
fitness
membership
.
Submitted by gihanagaya1993 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: