Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agre or disagree?

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good, valuable member of society. More than that,outside and
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or computer ,they can spend it
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will be involved in
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life of them, supporting those in need , like homeless persons, older people, or even animal shelters.Cleaning streets ,parks and rivers, planting trees and
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teenagers
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the whole society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteer work
  • community service
  • sense of responsibility
  • skill development
  • social awareness
  • empathy
  • crowdsource ideas
  • societal issues
  • broaden perspective
  • admissions process
  • resume enrichment
  • community welfare
  • mandatory volunteering
  • personal choice
  • positive experience
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