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The workplace nowadays is trying to employ the equal number of females and males. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, employers are willingly providing equal employment opportunities to
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men
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 and
women
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. While some people may have a different opinion, I believe that
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 practice should be normalized all around the world for its silent benefits to a company and the working community.
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 with, male and female workers have proven their gender-based skills over time in the job sector.
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, there are different ways in which
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 and
women
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 contribute to their employer requirements. While
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 are stronger, determined and persistent in their respective jobs,
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 employees hold an equal rank
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 by being creative, intelligent and great at communication. In their own way, they
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 suit some jobs better than the other. As an illustration, Abbott hires more female researchers for research and development, and
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 are prefered in the operations sector to better manage the daily workload.
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, in a male-dominated employment sector,
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 are raising their voices for equal job opportunities as
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. It definitely took a while to get noticed, but companies prefer gender variability in their hired staff.
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 shift in trend is occurring due to some main reasons.
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, it is hard for families to make a livelihood with only one member working, so
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 parents are seeking employment to have a better quality of life. Moving on to the
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 reason, many married couples are splitting up due to their own personal reasons, and
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 has caused
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men
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 and
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 to make ends meet on their own, which has caused the human resources department to reconsider
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 hiring strategy.
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, the company's image is
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 improved internationally when gender and racial equality
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 portrayed by the working different employees. In conclusion, I support
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 shifting paradigm in the hiring culture of employers as females are as much capable as
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 to some extent, but each has inherent sex-based traits which can provide additional benefits to their employers.
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