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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the modern era, the prices of non-renewable resources like oil, coal and gas are hiking day by day. Despite the
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 of
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fuel
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 being so high, the consumption still causes these resources to run out eventually. Even though it is believed by a group of people that the best way to tackle
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 issue is continuously rising the
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, I completely disagree that the
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 of
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 will be reduced by rising the
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. On the one hand, there are sundry reasons to support rising prices to decrease
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.
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, most of the time society thinks about the present and does not consider the future enough, so the
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 ought to be high to affect people's everyday lives.
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, folk will use more public transport rather than private cars for commuting from work to home and for other purposes.
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, society's fossil
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 as petrol for cars has an inelastic
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, it would not have any impact other than increasing tax and company revenue.
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, it is very common to see that every adult in a family has a personal car. If the cost of
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 steps up, they might share cars with other family members.
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, fossil
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 consumption will be decreased.
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, a significant increase in expenditure would not only impact each individual but
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 the whole company.
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 prices not only impact each individual but
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 the whole economy because it is not only linked to transport but
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 to food production, home eating and entertainment. As a consequence, the standard of living will be drastically affected and
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 the poorer parts of society would become poorer. In conclusion, from the aforementioned discussion, while the rising expenditure is one of the most commonly discussed solutions to
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 problems,
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 has too many negative variables
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, I think the increasing
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 could cause a small reduction in transport
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 but the far-reaching effects would be unfair and unsustainable.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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