The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

		

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the two pictures compare the building layout of the factory area with a proposed plan for development in the future.
It is clear that
all manufacturing plants will be replaced by buildings for residents, and
then
there will be a new
road
extending to the north with a bridge across the river. The five factories on the east
side
of the central circular
road
will be changed into three houses on each
side
of the
road
towards the east.
Additionally
, there will be a playground set between the river and
road
Correct article usage
the road
show examples
on the left, with a new area used for a school
at the end
and a medical centre on the left corner between the two roads. The straight connection of the previous vertical-direction
road
will be
re-built
Correct your spelling
rebuilt
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into a circle which is located at the centre of the
road
in the south. There will be a new
road
built towards the town after the original factories are replaced by the houses with a new arrangement. On the left
side
of the central circular
road
, shops will appear as well. In the north direction, a new house will be constructed on the farmland
side
,connected with a new
road
and a bridge built from the centre.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, side with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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