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Not all drivers obey the laws while driving on roads .What bare the reasons for this? What can be done to fix this problem?

#drivers #laws #roads
Being workaholics people tend to do daily activities fast-paced.
As a consequence
, people might disobey
road-traffic
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road traffic
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rules
 when they drive.The reasons for
this
 typically relate to liberal
rules
 and unawareness and the best solutions involve various government regulations.
To begin
 with,traffic
rules
 are not being implemented strictly in many places. If they exist it would not be severe to make people act against the
laws
.To illustrate,in,India if someone drives so fast in a restricted area and is
then
 caught by the police, he needs to pay a fine
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which is only about 100 Indian rupees. Knowing
such
 kinds of loopholes drivers ignore the importance of following traffic
rules
.
Similarly
, Many of them
are getting
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 zero awareness of
rules
 , regulations and obligations to society as a driver.Even in some ,countries ,it would be easier to get a license even though,the candidate is less knowledgeable about the
laws
 he needs to follow on the road.
This
 can cause serious problems like accidents and damage to public properties later on. There are various solutions to tackle these problems.
Firstly
, the government should enforce firm
laws
such
 as cancelling the driving license or charging a huge petition.To illustrate, if a driver is alert to a heavy penalty as a punishment for fast driving, he definitely cares not to unfollow the
laws
.
Secondly
, the road -traffic authorities should promote the installation of security cameras in all possible areas.
Thirdly
, awareness classes and campaigns should be provided for the public prior to permitting the license.
To sum up
,the presence of liberal punishments and
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less
informative
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 are considered the main reasons for rule-breaking .
Therefore
, the ideal solution will increase the chances
to follow
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road-traffic
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rules
 sincerely and strictly.
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