Some think that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together. Others, however, think that hosting the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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From ancient times,

people

considered organizing the

Olympic

games

to demonstrate their national interdependence and improve international relationships.

However

, host governments could use an enormous amount of money that spends on the

Olympic

games

to improve other aspects of life. As far as I am concerned, support of your own country and radical change in it is the most valuable goal, while the

Olympic

games

also

allow

people

to improve and understand relations with international

people

. Ambassadors of the

Olympic

games

could argue that

this

is important to keep the peace in the world. Due to frequent interactions with visitors from foreign

countries

people

make friends with other

nations

and understand their cultures.

Therefore

, they won't see enemies in other nationalities and will prevent wars. Simultaneously, being a fan of a team releases a lot of aggression, which not only increases the chances to build better relationships with the other

nations

but

also

prevents

further

ambitions to show superiority over other

countries

On the other hand

, investing money in education and medicine could prevent wars and do some other important tasks in

nations

life, may argue another side. Mostly,

countries

with the largest educational and medicine budget are the most peaceful

countries

in the world,

for example

, UK or France.

Moreover

, investment in different social facilities could increase the level of life.

This

may incentivise other

countries

to bring

nations

together and develop to achieve collective goals in undeniably crucial areas, space and science,

for instance

. To conclude,

although

, the

Olympic

games

surely solidify relationships between

nations

, money in their organisation could be used more efficiently than they are used now.

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