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SOme people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. they say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it legal requirement. to what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

#people #waste #homes #governments #requirement #laws
Many
people
 think that governments have to make it obligatory for the
people
 to recycle their
waste
,
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 because there
are
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 not enough amount of
waste
 being recycled.
However
, I tend to disagree completely with their point of view of making it obligatory for several reasons. When the government makes the recycling of the
homes'
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waste
 obligatory, many citizens will refuse to do it, because we live in a democratic society, and forcing the
people
 to make certain actions will result in resistance of the
people
. As we live in the
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first
 century, if the country
want
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 to make certain laws or rules it
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 to be done
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 giving the
people
 the freedom of choice, especially if the item
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in
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 not so crucial like
waste
 recycling. The governments can increase the amount of
homes'
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waste
 being recycled
through
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 several ways.
Firstly
, it could make incentives for
people
 who recycle their houses'
waste
, by decreasing the taxes they pay, or the water and electricity bills.
For instance
, in
Egypt
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 the
people
 who
recycles
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 their
waste
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receives
recieves
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receive
reduction
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on
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the
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 water and electricity bills.
Secondly
, awareness campaigns could be done,
to
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show the
people
 the importance of the
waste
 being reused and recycled, and how it would be beneficial for the
people
on
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 the long run.
Finally
, displaying the benefits for the environment if the
waste
have
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 been recycled. In conclusion, I hold the notion that governments should not force
the
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people
 for reusing
their homes
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waste
, but they should encourage
people
 to do so through
another
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 ways and methods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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