There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to inform you about
issue
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of
bus
service in my area,
Paramata
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Paramatta
suburb of Sydney. Since
last
two
weeks
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the
bus
service is not being operated as per timetable and
hence
commuters are badly affected. The
bus
timings are crucial to reach on time for public and employees. I have to reach to
office
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at 8:30 AM;
however
, I am not able to manage the same due to mismanagement of
bus
timings. The students are not able to attend classes as per schedule. I would like to suggest that
company
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shall intervene and take strict actions to run buses on regular timings.
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, Company shall
predefined
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all the routes based on the traffic congestion so
last
moment route
change
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can be avoided. I would be happy to provide more details and
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if required. I am looking forward
for
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necessary
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neccesary
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actions. Yours faithfully, John Derick
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhering to schedules
  • inconvenience
  • daily routine
  • punctuality
  • frequency during peak hours
  • overcrowding
  • commuters
  • update system
  • reliable
  • maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • irregular bus timings
  • passengers
  • delays
  • unreliable
  • appointments
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