The government should pay to the parents of very young children, so that one of them can stay at home and look after their children. What do you think are the pros and cons of this policy? Justify your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent times, most parents have
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considerable issues
about
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taking
care
of their newborn babies because of a busy schedule, some people strongly believe that the authority should finance parental
care
. The main advantage of
this
trend is that it would help to take
care
of their
children
and the drawback is that it can affect the economy. On the one hand, receiving welfare from the authority has a crucial role in its society, the main advantage of
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is that it would help certainly to
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for their
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proper way because they can stay at home without any financial difficulty. With a busy schedule parents hire nannies or daycare as a consequence,
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can affect
children
's mental because sufficient funds will positively affect
children
's life.
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, research shows,
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amateur
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have been affected with mental health problems because of without parental
care
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way, the government proper funds
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formative years
  • cognitive development
  • financial burden
  • low-income families
  • gender roles
  • gender equality
  • workplace
  • economic strain
  • divert resources
  • public services
  • healthcare
  • education
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • socialization
  • structured learning
  • daycare/early education programs
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