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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter: 1. Describe the item 2. Explain where and when you lost it 3. Say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir, I want to draw
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attention
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 my concern
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the lost
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lost
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 of my
briefcase
 during travel on
train
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the train
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 from Delhi to
bangalore
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Bangalore
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 on 25th August. My PNR number is N24HH452.It was medium size black
color
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briefcase
 of the brand American
tourister
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. The lost bag contains my educational certificates which are
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proofs of my academic qualification and
very
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 precious for my professional life.
This
 incident
has
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happened on
arrival
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the arrival
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 of my train at
bangalore
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Bangalore
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 station. I was sitting in
Passenger
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the Passenger
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 hall on platform3 and waiting for my cab .I took a short nap and got
astnonished
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astonished
 when I opened my eyes and saw my missing
briefcase
. Looks like,
Some one
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Someone
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 has robbed my luggage.
Moreover
, I lost a few expensive dresses which
was
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 purchased to gift
my
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 parents.
Next
 month I will be joining as
Government
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a Government
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 employee in District Police and need my education certificates as
joining
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a joining
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 document. I would request you to please take my complaint and look into the CCTV footages of passenger hall of
specified
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the specified
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 date. Please inform me if you get my lost
briefcase
 as it
valuable
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is valuable
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papers
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. I will be looking forward
resposne
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response
 from your company. Yours faithfully, Rahil Kumar
Submitted by info.rahil on

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