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Children in some parts of the world have less responsibility compared to children in the past. Some people think it is a positive change, however others think of it as a negative change. What do you think?

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Responsibility
 plays a vital role in everybody's
life
. Some communities believe that In some ,areas offsprings are less responsible compared to past times while some others argue with
this
 matter and says that there is a
change
 in children in a negative
way
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the scenarios and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter. On the one
side
, From the earlier to the present era there are great changes in everything. In the same
way
, there are
also
 some changes in the responsibilities of a child. In some areas, due to family
problems
 parents' offspring are taking
responsibility
 to take care of their family.
For example
, A person who has financial
problems
,
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 takes
responsibility
 to take care of their family and build standard
life
 with their parents. In
this
way
, It is a great
change
 in a positive
way
. On the other
side
, Accompanied by positive
change
, negative
change
 is
also
 there in the world.
This
change
 depends on the behaviour of the children.
This
 negative impact
also
 occurs due to family
problems
 only.
For example
, An elder child in a family feels very responsible to look after their family but a younger child feels that it is not his
responsibility
 when there are financial
problems
. To sum up, I think the given statements are true. In
this
 world, there is a negative
side
 accompanied by a positive
side
. Responsibilities are big things to handle in everybody's
life
. Children will have an impact on their surroundings. They behave according to their environment. A positive environment gives positive whereas a negative environment gives negative
change
. But I think Everyone in
this
 should feel responsible and build their
life
 in a powerful manner.
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