Some People Think That Success In Life Comes From Hard Work And Determination, While Others Think That There Are More Important Factors Such As Money And Appearance.

Nowadays,
importance
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of becoming successful in life has increased more than ever because of the hyper-
competitisve
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world in which we live today.Many individuals believe that success is a result of sheer hard work and determination while others are of the view that
money
and personal appearance play a more dominant role.
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essay will delineate both of these views as well as outline my own opinion in upcoming paragraphs.
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,the side which considers
money
and personal appearance to be more important is of the view that
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,
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looks provide an additional advantage to stand out in the crowd.
Money
has its own influence and provides a way to get better education facilities which
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in better career opportunities.As
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graduates from highly-ranked universities get better jobs.
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, a better appearance helps to give a positive impression to the person in front and may increase our chances of acceptance by others.But, all these advantages are losing their significance these days.Because
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companies are focusing more and more on skills rather than
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and looks of their employees.
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, no company will prefer a spoiled individual who studies at a good university over a more skilled and hardworking employee.
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, even the industries which were supposed to be only for good-looking persons are starting to hire persons who have more skills.
For Instance
, many actors who have worked in many movies were selected on the basis of their acting skills rather than their looks.
On the other hand
, hard effort and conviction are required in every field. Even cash itself is an outcome of true hard effort and dedication. Long story short, I am of the view that hard work and willpower play a much more significant role than wealth and looks. As, cash and display may provide a better position in a field, but , they can never guarantee the success of an individual who is not willing to give their best shot.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • perseverance
  • discipline
  • resilience
  • effort
  • tenacity
  • external factors
  • financial resources
  • favorable appearance
  • perceptions
  • advantages
  • intrinsic
  • extrinsic
  • sustainable
  • facilitating
  • undeniable
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