A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays,
people
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often care about others' social status and wealth than about being a
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trustworthy
, peaceful, and friendly
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.
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, I do not agree that these old-fashioned values are not important anymore,
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, they are not the most important
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least. The importance of social status and material possessions seldom remains unjudged because relations with the better
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are mostly needed for
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. If
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person
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a person
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could give more than others,
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people
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would be more interested in interaction and measure of his or her personality.
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, a
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who could be a better partner in a business due to financial abilities would be preferable
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a
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without them.
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,
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judge others mostly by their potential benefits in constructing
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, to construct
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robust
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, there are required old-fashioned values
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honour and trust. To build the partnership, members should be able not only to trust each other
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but
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to understand the value of being not honourable. Unless one of
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failed the vows of being open and
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, everyone would have a good reputation and
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range of abilities and opportunities to construct new
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with other honour partners.
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, old-fashioned values are important too
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but
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valued on
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the stage
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of building
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. To conclude,
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the tendency
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of
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evaluation
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of
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a
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according to social status and financial abilities is dominant due to
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the requirement
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of constructing
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beneficial
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beneficial
relationships
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, thereby shifting
importance
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the importance
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of honour and trust to the stage of building strong and robust bonds with other
people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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