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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activitiesDoes this situation have more advantage or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays most
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clerks
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 are
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preferred
 to sacrifice their spare
time
 for working beyond the clock that has been scheduled.
This
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 drawbacks regarding their welfare, both physically and mentally; they might
also
 lose
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plenty of opportunities in their life. It seems that the flaws prevail
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 benefits which
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Employer
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The employer
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 is simply a human who has a limitation, especially their durability to stand. an overload-working person who
compel
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herself
theirself
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 to go beyond their capability usually
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with
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certain illnesses and
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psychological
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psychological
 disorders. To illustrate, people who
working
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 8 hours a day of five-sevenths a week find
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herself
their self
theirself
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suffer
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with
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such
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 and find it so tough to manage their
emotion
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 during the working days. They, eventually, claim that they
were struggle
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 to
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perform
peform
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perform
 healthily and conveniently. Due to frequently skipping their free
time
, the workers would lose their
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 to gather around with their relatives.
This
 makes them meet with
such
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dissatisfaction
satisfaction
 entire their life. The majority of retired employers are unlikely to indulge their life.
Additionally
,
trauma
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 of losing
time
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occasionally
ocassionally
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occasionally
appear
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 in the retirement days
as a result
 of skipping
family's
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 moments.
Hence
, they
finally
 feel lonely. To conclude, most of the company officers who take extra jobs as
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subtitude
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 of their spare
time
 commonly deal with certain
ilness
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illness
illnesses
 and feel isolated at the end of their career. If
this
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 people let
this
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happened
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happend
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happen
, I believe that
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 numerous people would not feel contented.
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