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Learning depends not upon the personality or the methodology of teacher, but rather on student's attitude on his or her own learning. Do you agree with this statement?

#personality #methodology #teacher #student #attitude
As we all know, learning is an indispensable process for any human being in order to live and survive in
this
 world. But it is
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believed
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believed
 by some that it depends on
student's
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 affinity towards their work of study rather than
traits
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 and guidelines of
teacher
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. Personally, I partly disagree with
this
 opinion, as both are equally important.
This
 can be proved by analysing
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 impacts
teachers
 and
students
 can bring to successful learning. Good learning can come from
students
 being self-aware of how important education is and how they can do their best to study.
For instance
, a pupil who already has their goals set will be more likely to succeed,
in contrast
 to one not doing so.
Therefore
, they have
this
 kind of mindset when they are going to do whatever it takes to get flying
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 or scholarships, whether there is a teacher to help them or not. But having
teachers
 readily available is something you can not underestimate. In fact,
students
 who can not be disciplined enough desperately need someone
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 them instructions and
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 them to learn. So, in order to get the best of what you want to learn, it could be done with a mix of having the right mentality and gaining more knowledge through
methods
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 of
teachers
 themselves. All in all, pupils'
attitude
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 and
teachers
' traits and ways are both essential. I do not entirely concur with the statement because both play their part if someone yearns for effective study. Once
teachers
' ways of teaching can corporate
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the right attitude
students
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, learning will be more beneficial than ever.
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