Obesity was once considered a disease of adults; however, it is becoming increasingly common among children. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done to help children stay healthy?

It has been noticeable these days , that both adults and children suffer from obesity and the numbers are rapidly increasing. The upcoming paragraphs will illustrate the reasons behind

this

phenomenon and suggest some effective solutions to tackle

this

problem.

To begin

with, it is well known that long working hours have totally changed the lifestyle of

people

around the world. it has pushed them to find alternatives to homemade

food

.

Therefore

, fast

food

was the optimal option for them because fast

food

outlets are found everywhere and the price is affordable for all income groups. At the same ,time the benefits of

this

solution were eclipsed by its drawbacks as

this

kind of

food

has led to overweight and other dangerous diseases.A good example to illustrate

this

claim is that many recent studies have shown a clear link between the consumption of fast

food

and the rise in obesity levels among different age groups. Another reason is that

people

nowadays tend to spend their leisure time passively rather than actively.

in other words

, technology has changed the activities

people

like to do , they would rather go to watch a 3D movie rather than go to exercise with others. Kids

also

prefer to play video games rather than playing a soccer ball or riding their bikes with their friends. Because of

this

sedentary ,lifestyle adults and kids started to gain weight as they consume calories without burning them. The ultimate and most effective solution could be by raising

people

's awareness about their health. It could be by encouraging students to participate in extracurricular activities and offering programmes to raise their knowledge about healthy and balanced diets and

besides

that governments ought to make fast

food

companies offer

besides

their 'classic' meals 'diet' meals to give

people

option to choose better and healthier

food

. To recapitulate, The aforementioned points, clearly show the reasons behind the

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among adults and young children and suggested some solutions to undertake to tackle the deteriorating level of overweight issues. Meanwhile, these suggestions will not be achievable if individuals did not respond and started to change their lifestyles.