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People can eat a wide variety of food from other regions. As a result, they are eating a lot of foreign food instead of locally produced food. Do you think the advantages of eating foreign foods are more than their harms?

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It is certainly true that the availability of each
food
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 product across the world has changed the eating style of
people
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 entirely. It is stated that imported
food
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 items are eaten by
masses
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 significantly as compared to the local
food
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 in today's time.
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, I personally ponder that these eating habits of
people
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 have more drawbacks than benefits that will be elaborated
in
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 detail in the forthcoming clauses with suitable instances. To commence with, there are multifarious reasons why consumption of imported
food
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 is regarded as disadvantageous for
public
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the public
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. The preponderant demerit is the disappearance of cultural
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. To explain it, unquestionably, if
people
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 tend to eat foreign
food
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 regularly
instead
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 of locally produced goods,
as a result
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,
native
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the native
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food
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 of that place may
loss
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their
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its
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 existence somewhere. To exemplify it, take
an
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 example of Punjab where
people
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 use to eat varieties of
food
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 products that come from other countries
instead
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 of
own
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their own
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 one,
as a result
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,
cultural
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the cultural
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food
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 of that region is at the edge of extinction currently.
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, eating more imported
food
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 may
proven
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be proven
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 threatful
for
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to
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 the preservation of native
food
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.
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,
the
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another striking con of eating foreign
food
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 is the contamination of
environment
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the environment
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. It is a matter of fact that usage of the ships, aeroplanes and trains are done by the individuals for the sake of
food
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 importation, as a
consequences
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, not only water, but air pollution
also
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 spread Continuously on the earth.
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, despite having various demerits of eating foreign
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, it
also
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 provides few
of
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the benefits to
public
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the public
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. The
first
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 and foremost advantage of eating exotic
food
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 is that it
strengthen
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 the interpersonal relationships among nations.
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, undoubtedly, when all the countries
deals
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 with each other for the importation of
food
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,
then
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 it is
obviously
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 that they become dependent upon one another thoroughly,
as
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and as
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a repercussions
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, their relationships may never be
broke
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 at any
expenses
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expense
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.
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, the kiwi which is known as a native fruit of Newzealand and now every nation
import
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imports
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 that fruit from there, as a
consequences
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consequence
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, it becomes possible for that country to build
better
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a better
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relationship
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relationships
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 with
well- developed
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well-developed
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 nations as well. Thereby, importing
food
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 from other nations
also
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eliminate
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eliminates
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 the chances of conflicts among regions. To conclude, unquestionably, having overseas cuisines is not that much outrageous for folks, it should be eaten by them
in
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at some limit;
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otherwise
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 the consequences may be unimaginable as the contamination of
environment
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the environment
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 and existence of cultural
food
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 may lose due to overconsumption of it.
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