ome people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on streets. Still, there are robberies that happen inside houses. What do you think is the best thing a person can do to ensure his/her own security? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Re: Lionel
Ramamurthy
, aged 63
Mr
Lionel
Ramamurthy
was admitted on 4 February 2019 having contracted pneumonia. He is now ready for discharge back into your care tomorrow. On admission, he was experiencing fevers and
rigors
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. He suffered
dyspnoea
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from dyspnoea
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, wheezing and sleeplessness. He had chest and abdominal pain
due to
prolonged persistent coughing. After a week in hospital, he has stabilised and his breathing problems are now resolved.
However
, he still experiences some chest and abdominal pain, with a dry cough. His nursing management in
hospital
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initially
consisted of a walking frame and assistance with showering and dressing.
Mr
Ramamurthy
is now more independent. He is
also
able to walk about slowly without assistance,
and
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shower and use the toilet independently. Paracetamol may be administered as needed if chest and abdominal pain persists and
Mr
Ramamurthy
should be kept warm. Please encourage oral fluids, and ensure that he sits up, rather than
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down, whenever possible to ensure postural drainage. He should ambulate regularly, and continue with deep breathing and coughing exercises.
Mr
Ramamurthy
was very weak on admission to hospital
,
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but has gained weight with dietitian input. He will need ongoing monitoring of his diet. If you have any queries, please contact me.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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