Some people believe that adults always do exercise and sports because of the major sports events that shown on T.V like the Olympic Games and Football World Cup. While others say that there are many other ways to encourage them to practice exercises other than T.V shows. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The reason why more students should be able to have the chance to study medicine in college is
because
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doctors
are essential to
the
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apply
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society nowadays.
Doctor
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are important, for their role was to
securre
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secure
the safety of citizens.
Reprehensiblly
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Reprehensible
, in the Shanghai lockdown, there was an
ergent
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urgent
need
of
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doctors
among local people. Since there is indeed a lack of
doctors
in society, it is deplorable for college to decrease the number of students wishing to become a doctor. It will be
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if someday, there will be no
doctors
to cure patients.
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will highly increase the
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of
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people
poeple
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people
dying every year.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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